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I like your poem; your word choice is excellent. Aside from having a nice flow, your poem is great because of the meaning behind it. I agree that most soldiers probably don't know what they're fighting for. Rather, they repeat what they've been told, without actually understanding it, just as a school child might write what their teacher told them on a test without knowing what it really means.

Post 1

Saturday, October 7, 2006 - 11:14pm

Wesley - I wrote this poem a few years ago for a brave-hearted, independent thinker. I hope you like it.

Marty

WORDS

In a secret chamber of my heart

Where there's no room for a lie,

Not even one small tiny part,

Where there's found no alibi,

In that closely guarded center

Behind thick walls that none can scale,

Where deceit may never enter

And hypocrisy will fail,

There's a truth that's carved in stone,

One that took some time to chisel -

Monolithic, cold, alone -

Yet it makes my spirit sizzle.

Often have I, silent, prayed

The solemn holy words unspoken,

Words that I have not betrayed -

And to this day my faith's unbroken.

Remember what you now shall read

Words you ne'er again might see.

Take them with you - pay them heed -

Reflect on them most carefully.

"Do not trust the words of others -

Parents, teachers, friends, or brothers.

Alone the wine of wisdom drink,

For truth comes but to those who think.

And when some people bully you,

Dictating what to think or do,

Fight them with the battle cry

That guards your mind with the sacred word: why?"

Post 2

Sunday, October 8, 2006 - 8:58pm

Wow! You're a great poet! I can really relate to that poem; the Government dictates me everyday at public school. All the time I am thinking of how things could be dramatically improved so easily, and most of the time it involves the Government minding their own business (not something they're too keen on, apparently).

I specifically enjoyed the beginning, where you talk about the absence of lies, deception, and hypocrisy. May I ask, is the secret chamber of your heart symbolic of something?

All in all, a fantastic poem that I really enjoyed reading. You have a lot of talent!

Post 3

Sunday, October 8, 2006 - 11:05pm

I am glad you like my work. You will find a list of my articles, jokes and poems here: http://rebirthofreason.com/Users/1698.shtml

The "secret chamber of my heart" refers to that part of my mind in which I, and I alone, consult when I must make a decision or create music or write a poem. I, at times, look to others for insight, for information, for inspiration, for new and refreshing points of view. Then I enter the "secret chamber" and sort it all out by myself. Are there ideas out there that are correct? Are there issues that need more thinking on my part? Did I make a mistake? (I once goofed in a math article I didn't proof read as much as I should have.) Dids someone's viewpoint hit the nail on the head?

I have no staff in the secret chamber - no cabinet - no advisors - no panel - not even company. I sit alone, gather my thoughts, make decisions, create art, all the while defended by the sacred word, why.

Here's another poem I wrote. (I don't remember if I posted it on this website.) I await your evaluation.

Truth

Until the day my life will end,

Shining truth will be my friend.

Just as my eyesight doesn't lie,

There shall be naught in my mind's eye

That cannot stand the light of day �

Deception, falsehood, stay away!

For I seek truth that's carved in stone

And for that I would walk alone

Forsaking the safety of the pack

Whose harness of lies chained to my back

Would pull me here and drag me there �

But mine's a soul they won't ensnare.

Reason, justice, integrity, trust �

Ride with me � my cause is just.

Post 4

Sunday, October 22, 2006 - 11:15am